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[Shadow's grip]

some comments

I see some promise, here. There's still a lot of room for refinement but your pacing is steady. Unfortunately, the music cut short, but you mentioned that. In the future, I'd suggest not letting something through the submission door until you've got that worked out. Other than that, watch your tenses and your spelling. If you want your writing to carry your work, you've got to be meticulous. "Drapes" and "veil" were spelled wrong in the same sentence. Check that stuff, always.

Good luck!

Jestercap13 responds:

hey thanx but on my computer the music made the whole thing but when i posted it it didnt but oh well i try better and the spelling sorry i couldnt think of what the word was but o well ill do better later